Wow, during this entire chapter, I was holding my breath, reading as fast as possible without missing a word.
I think your choice of third-person limited point of view was perfect for this: we are as much in the dark as Kyuhyun is, we only know how he feels but no one else. It's really suspenseful and exciting! I loved it!
Kyuhyun still managed to retain his wit despite his confusion: I loved the "intrusive exfoliation" part. XD It's funny how he makes predictions about his fate, but keeps being wrong..At least before Zhoumi, his predictions were much worse than what actually happened, but now, with no mental preparations whatsoever, he may get fondled, and manhandled. ♥?
It seems that ZhouMi has some power over those mysterious men, so I have a feeling he's some kind of king or prince or something. I wonder what this ceremony is about. It sure looks like some kind of marital thing, but it's kind of weird that they haven't asked Kyuhyun a single thing, except his name. What was that charcoal rectangle they drew on his chest? And how did Zhou Mi know that Kui Xian was Kyuhyun's Chinese name? @_@ I'm so confused, and I'm kind of worried about Kyuhyun's fate. I know he isn't easy and probably won't allow Zhou Mi to give him "bad touches" without a fight, but still, where the hell is he?! Will he ever come back to the other world? Would Zhou Mi exist in that world?
...all of this to say: I'm dying to know. Don't leave me in the dark too long, okay? ♥
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Date: 2009-07-16 06:59 am (UTC)I think your choice of third-person limited point of view was perfect for this: we are as much in the dark as Kyuhyun is, we only know how he feels but no one else. It's really suspenseful and exciting! I loved it!
Kyuhyun still managed to retain his wit despite his confusion: I loved the "intrusive exfoliation" part. XD It's funny how he makes predictions about his fate, but keeps being wrong..At least before Zhoumi, his predictions were much worse than what actually happened, but now, with no mental preparations whatsoever, he may get fondled, and manhandled. ♥?
It seems that ZhouMi has some power over those mysterious men, so I have a feeling he's some kind of king or prince or something. I wonder what this ceremony is about. It sure looks like some kind of marital thing, but it's kind of weird that they haven't asked Kyuhyun a single thing, except his name. What was that charcoal rectangle they drew on his chest? And how did Zhou Mi know that Kui Xian was Kyuhyun's Chinese name? @_@ I'm so confused, and I'm kind of worried about Kyuhyun's fate. I know he isn't easy and probably won't allow Zhou Mi to give him "bad touches" without a fight, but still, where the hell is he?! Will he ever come back to the other world? Would Zhou Mi exist in that world?
...all of this to say: I'm dying to know. Don't leave me in the dark too long, okay? ♥