"presented to him in such in insidious little way" Should it be "an" insidious little way?
"wrapped with love clearly by Ryeowook, left Kangin himself." Should the "himself" be left off? Kangin hasn't really been mentioned yet by name so it sounds a little odd. Unless you want to smash a mention of Kangin earlier in there?
MEEP SO HAPPY. Its the bestest one. T.T I want to be first comment on it... please, can I? It'll be very short. I just cannot resist the cuteness. lol
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Date: 2008-12-23 04:13 am (UTC)"wrapped with love clearly by Ryeowook, left Kangin himself." Should the "himself" be left off? Kangin hasn't really been mentioned yet by name so it sounds a little odd. Unless you want to smash a mention of Kangin earlier in there?
MEEP SO HAPPY. Its the bestest one. T.T I want to be first comment on it... please, can I? It'll be very short. I just cannot resist the cuteness. lol